day at the zoo!
one day a little girl [who plays the violin] was going to the zoo today. When they arrived tothe zoo,they brought a picnic with peanut- butter and jelly sandwiches and grape juice.Once they had finished their lunch the little girls grandma and mum told the little girl that they were going to the animal section HORRAY!!!!! They arrived to the animal section and the first thing they saw was… penguins.
The little girl was allowed to feed the penguins fish yuck and then they saw fluffy baby penguins. After they fed the penguins the little girl wanted a purple balloon so her mum got her on and it floated away the little girl started to sob but her grandma bought her another one she was so happy.
She saw baby elephants and a big ginormous elephant. Then, it was time to go home the little girl was sad that she had to go home but she had a wonderful day!!!!!!!
Sofia I really like you’re work . keep up with the good work .
Good job Sofia but you missed out the capital letters on the fist two paragraphs.
There is a good use of parenthesis in the story and it was enjoyable to read. The only thing I would change is you need to remember to use capital letters.
Keep up the good work!! 🙂
check if that was near 100 words because it looks like it is a lot more and I like how naturally you used the words well done simply splendid