100wc #week 7 JACK

Posted on 21st October 2020 by JackSharpe

One dark night in Bells field a menice  robber Jim had just broke into my friend’s house  and stole a bag of  loot . He always  breaks in around midnight because he knew everyone would be asleep .Jim had scarlet red hair a fluffy coat and always danced to everyones house. If jim isn’t  happy he will go on his scooter and drive on the  concrete. One night  after the robbery of Christians house he was named the phantom thief and his logo was a fox head with a lightning bolt through .The house was robbed but the poliece found him because of the siren and was sent to jail…

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5 Responses to 100wc #week 7 JACK

  1. MajaJarema says:
    21st October 2020 at 14:28

    Great use of all the words but spelling police .

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  2. KyleWilson says:
    21st October 2020 at 14:33

    great story but you spelt police wrong

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  3. NiamhMeek says:
    21st October 2020 at 14:37

    good but why jail

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  4. Máire O'Keeffe says:
    30th October 2020 at 16:21

    Hi Jack
    I think you have used the words of the prompt very well in this week’s 100 word challenge. Your description of the character, Jim the robber, was excellent and I could see him in my mind with his red hair and his fluffy coat dancing his way to his next robbery. The idea of him going on the concrete driving his scooter if he isn’t happy brought a smile to my face. I’m wondering was the siren on the scooter or was there an alarm on the house. I’m also wondering what happened next???? Well done! I really enjoyed reading this very creative 100 word challenge.
    Máire O’Keeffe (Team 100wc) Galway Ireland

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