100wc Week#12[21] Niamh Szymon

Posted on 25th November 2020 by NiamhMeek

With stones being kicked onto the road, a little boy was trudging up the steep vast hill that had lay ahead of him. His feet stumbled with rocks stuck in his laces. His red nose that made him look like Rudolph the red nosed reindeer got darker and much more sore the higher he advanced up the hill. The chain that helped his bike to cycle was turning to rust like it was from an abandoned junkyard in the middle of a sand stormed desert. Whilst he was stumbling to his crocked house, I silently muttered, ‘He felt really ill..”

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2 Responses to 100wc Week#12[21] Niamh Szymon

  1. KyleWilson says:
    25th November 2020 at 13:48

    https://longtownprimary.j2bloggy.com/Y5-100-Word-Challenge/100wcweek1221-kyle-and-riley/

    Great writing I really liked the start of it and how you used he felt really ill in a good way

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  2. Máire O'Keeffe says:
    7th December 2020 at 12:17

    Hi Niamh and Szymon
    I really enjoyed reading your 100 word challenge as it had me asking lots of questions. Your opening line set the scene for quite a mystery story and I’m a big fan of mysteries. The language you’ve used has also added greatly to this eg “stones being kicked onto the road” “trudging” “the steep vast hill” – these all create a picture of a little boy struggling. You’ve also used the prompt in a creative way. I’d love to know what happened next! Well done.
    Máire O”Keeffe (Team 100wc)
    Galway Ireland

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