One day there was a small mice and it was running across a field and there was a bigger rat he was scared to cross the if only a smaller mice . Could do it I am sure bigger rat could do it . The sun started to rise it was getting dark .AND d it was remembrance day there was a lot of people were waering they were a red flower and they went to the town there was people wearing them and then there was a man driving a car and he was parking up and got them !
Change mice to mouse
At the start you forgot were the mice was crossing.
Great use of punctuation and spelling!