Dear diary,
I was walking out my house when a huge beast (a bee) was lying dead on the floor. Since I’m a scientist , I decided to take it to the lab.
We searched for finger prints and you’ll never believe what we found! It was Queen BEE and she had sticky , yellow honey that caused her to fall on our house. I went my research room and got all of my tools. Me and my partner scraped the honey off her delicate wings and let her fly free into the bright blue sky and watched her fly back home
George and Isla,
I love that your piece is not just creative, but it is also a bit scientific. I am also happy to see such evidence of kindness by the narrator and the partner.
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA