WE TOOK NO NOTICE OF THE SIGN
One day as the trees were blowing and me staring at this strange forest in front of my yard .I was just walking home from school ( in Cumbria ) and it was turning night and things started to get a little strange behind me .I heard a big bang “BANG.” I noticed that it was heading from that strange forest what I knew something was wrong with it . I walked across the road over to the forest and there it was . I saw light behind the lazy trees and I was MIND BLOWN when I saw a alien ship . One of them saw me…
Well done Jessica good use of parenphsis [brackets]
I liked how you left it on a cliff hanger. I think you could’ve used different sentence starters than I. I also liked how you used capital letters to make it sound louder in my head.