Dear diary,
It was one ordinary day UNTIL the attack bell sounded , we instantly knew that a bomber ship was trying to attack the castle. We ran up the never-ending staircase to the traumatising towers! When we got up there we herd a ” BANG”!!!!!! Me and my team quickly loaded up the canon and attacked [ I know it sounds kind of devastating but it’s our orders and duty ]. Until they struck again but this time they hit our drawbridge. Rubble and smoke filling up our 200 year old kingdom “AAGGHH” we herd our majesty screaming like she was in a tornado…
Good job Ollie and Markuss, but please check your spellings.
YOU HAVE GOT GOOD DESCRIPTION AN USE OF COMMAS EXLAMATION MARKS AND ELIPSIS
Good ideas but it’s a bit boring