One day a boy called Charlie rolled out of his bed and he decided to do some crafts he made a white castle and glued on some leaves. Charlie went to see his friends Logan and Sophie. Charlie showed them the castle but a mean boy called Joe hit it out of Charlies hands and stood on it. Charlie ,Logan and Sophie went to Logan’s tree house and made a plan…
The next day they atached a rope to a bucket of water and waited for Joe to come. when Joe was under the bucket Sophie let go of the rope and Joe got soaked!
Hi Lewis,
This was a great tale of seeing a bully get his comeuppance; I can just imagine how disappointed Charlie must have been to have his castle destroyed. My only tip would be to describe feelings more to help your reader feel.
Keep on writing.
Mrs MooreTeam 100London