In hawaii , Amy and Joe , who were siblings , decided to go to the beach which was behind their hotel . It was an ordinary day , soon after they realised that something wasn’t right ; there was nobody there … They wandered around for a few minutes until they heard a light voice behind them . There was nobody there but they could see mysterious figures of different colours . As Amy and Joe approached them they started shuffling around . They have never seen something like this in their whole entire life !
There was a bottle with blue liquid in it . “I’m really thirsty ” said Joe
A well written entry Anastazja – well done!
I enjoyed your use of relative clauses and punctuation to help structure your writing. Try to start sentences in different ways and be thoughtful about words that you need as you only have 100!
Keep up the great writing!