100wc#week29 Emma

THE CAR IN THE ROOF!!

Once I was on a walk with my best friend (called Paige) we were heading to the forest for our project for school. suddenly we heard some police sirens they were going to the house before the wood. then we and my best friend saw that there was a car in the houses roof!! The police would not let us walk through the wood.

The next day the car in the roof was all over the news! Me and my friend walked back to the house and went inside…

Next day on the news girls missing in mysterious house.

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1 Response to 100wc#week29 Emma

  1. Admin says:

    Ooohhh very mysterious ending Emma – I’m very intrigued and left wanting more! Good punctuation too – a super piece!

    Instead of ‘all over the news’ could you have written ‘a global viral sensation’?

    Keep up the wonderful writing!

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