i was walking alongside the pathway and i looked up and saw this car in a roof i phoned a friend and asked them to come over just so i’m not scared so they came and they said have you went in yet and i said no because i was scared and they said what are you waiting for lets go on in so we went in and i heard a slam we ran upstairs i don’t know why but we heard a voice going get out we recorded it and showed the police but we didn’t leave yet we still explored and we finally found the car in the …
Good use of description for emotions Jacob but remember your sentence punctuation – capital letters and full stops!