Today was a very unusual day because me and family were on our normal walk of the day. Then a lot of police cars and fire trucks came storming by. We didn’t know what was going on but then we decided to follow them. We started to get closer. We started to see smoke and when we got closer and closer it looked a lot worse.
We were finally at the destination. I could see a car sticking out of a bungalow roof the police went to investigate. But there was no one in the house …
A great short sentence to change the pace of the writing and create excitement Rhys – well done!
Try to think about a clearer structure next time.
Keep up the great writing!