THE CAR IN THE ROOF!!
One day me and my friend Paige were walking the dogs. Then we saw something weird. “WHY IS THERE A CAR IN THE ROOF OF MY HOUSE!!!” i just said something i never thought i would say. There was a massive crowd around the whole of my house! ( for some reason i felt famous) My mam came rushing out of the house to say ” Oh my goodness, Jasmine can you believe there’s a car in in OUR ROOF!!”
I woke up and it was all a dream……or was it.
A very open ending Summer. I enjoyed your informal tone to the story with lots of discussion and great punctuation again (including capitalisation for the shock).
Next time, try to start in a more adventurous way.
Keep up the great writing!