it was a sunny day when sweat drips from your back me and my family were going to the beach to stay for the weekend so read on too find out about my weekend at the beach
First, we woke up I woke up super exited and early too my little brother and my big sister slept in [of course]
next, we had breakfast we all had … cheerios’ for breakfast and then we got in the car and drove for an hour to our beach hotel vacation
finally ,we arrived to our destination and had a great weekend we swam in the ocean and had a good beach hotelwekend
Positive- Great fronted adverbials and parenthesis.
Negative- Remember capital letters and full stops.
Really good except you forgot to include when it just wouldn’t take of Lilly T
It is good but you need capital letters