Lonely Balloon
There was a brown frightening never seen before balloon in the balloon party. Her name is Becca with no feelings inside of her. Every other balloon was colourful and had 100% of feeling inside . Suddenly, there was a black and white rare fancy balloon – who was the leader of the balloons. Never to be seen, a happy birthday one came around. The balloon’s name was Dannica . Her colour was red with a hint or purple in her eyes. Her best friend was kicked minutes after every one said a big happy birthday. She finally grew up and Becca got friends .
You need commas in the first sentence and the second one doesn’t make sense. I like the storyline and ending of it. Keep up the good work Dixie 🙂
well done dixie I loved your story well done
that was really sad I think I’m going to cry I hope that it never happens to me
Alisha