So, there’s this brown, balloon, and it’s really,REALLY frightening, also there’s this rumour that it’s cursed(people say,whoever touches it they’ll put a curse on the town, or THE ENTIRE WORLD.So it has never,EVER been kicked).Its so frightening even the police stay clear of it,which is really surprising, and the president has made a law that STRICTLY forbids us from touching it. Luckily, my family are coming over in 3 days.
Today, my family are finally coming over (yay) so I’m gonna nap until they get here. Now my cousin(a madlad) is here…oh god he just touched the really, cursed brown BALLOON…
Hi Kaiden ,this is a lovely story I would love to read more of your stories they give me suspense I really want to know what happened to the cousin I think you need to read through it to make sure it makes sense.
Hi kaiden I really enjoyed your reading and your description and your suspense it has left me on a cliff hanger about the cousin also I like you words that are in bold to make them stand out further more your punctuation is perfect keep up the good work kaiden !
Hi Kaiden love your story and want to read more keep up the great work and please make more.
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I just edited mine
wow that was really good . Keep up the good work . Oh and thankyou for my comment
Alisha